我的英译作《发廊情话》发表(附诗:博海泛舟)Love Talk at Hairdresser's

我英译的王安忆的得奖小说《发廊情话》由香港中文大学翻译研究中心享有国际声誉的《译丛》(Renditions) 半年刊 于2016年秋季第86期发表。 《译丛》历史悠久,是文学翻译界享誉的学术性汉译英翻译刊物,早在中国文学为世界所瞩目之前已经开始了耕耘,由宋淇先生于1...

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Thursday, January 25, 2018

英诗中译泰戈尔园丁第83首:她(附双语朗诵视频)Chinese Translation of The Gardener #83 by Rabindranath Tagore



英诗中译泰戈尔《园丁》第83首:她
英诗中译:牛娃娃 ©H.L.Glennie

 英汉双语朗诵视频


她居住在山坡上的玉米地边,春泉流经欢笑的溪涧,穿越古林庄重的树荫。女人来此装满水罐,行者在此休憩闲聊。她每日劳作寻梦于溪涧喧腾的音调。









“这里是同一片天空,” 她说,“只是撤除了山坡的藩篱,--这是流向一条河的同一支溪流,--同一片沃土展延出一个平原。 ”

“万物于此,”我叹道,“独缺我们。”

她悲哀地微笑,然后说,“你在我心里。”

我醒来,听见溪水喧哗莫名,雪松飒飒夜间。

©H.L.Glennie


这首诗物像和意象都丰富,象征性很强,关键点在于理解“我”和“你”的象征意义,理解不同的人会读出不同的意思。泰戈尔此间的语言很感性,同一类的主题,另一个诗人布罗茨基则用一种理性的语言从另一个视角切入,下列是我翻译的布罗茨基长诗《话语的一份子》十三节中的一节,从中可见一点线索,其余章节有机会再发布。



牛娃娃 译颂 ©H.L.Glennie


The Gardener #83
by Rabindranath Tagore
Translated by ©H.L.Glennie



She dwelt on the hillside by the edge of a maize-field, near the spring that flows in laughing rills through the solemn shadows of ancient trees.  The women came there to fill their jars, and travellers would sit there to rest and talk.  She worked and   dreamed daily to the tune of the bubbling stream.

One evening the stranger came down from the cloud-hidden peak; his locks were tangled like drowsy snakes.  We asked in wonder, "Who are you?"  He answered not but sat by the garrulous stream and silently gazed at the hut where she dwelt.  Our hearts quaked in fear and we came back home when it was night.

Next morning when the women came to fetch water at the spring by the_deodar_trees, they found the doors open in her hut, but her voice was gone and where was her smiling face?  The empty jar lay on the floor and her lamp had burnt itself out in the corner.  No one knew where she had fled to before it was morning--and the stranger had gone.

In the month of May the sun grew strong and the snow melted, and we sat by the spring and wept.  We wondered in our mind, "Is there a spring in the land where she has gone and where she can fill her vessel in these hot thirsty days?"  And we asked each other in dismay, "Is there a land beyond these hills where we live?"

It was a summer night; the breeze blew from the south; and I sat in her deserted room where the lamp stood still unlit.  When suddenly from before my eyes the hills vanished like curtains drawn aside.  "Ah, it is she who comes.  How are you, my child?   Are you happy?  But where can you shelter under this open sky?   And, alas, our spring is not here to allay your thirst."

"Here is the same sky," she said, "only free from the fencing hills,--this is the same stream grown into a river,--the same earth widened into a plain."  "Everything is here," I sighed, "only we are not."  She smiled sadly and said, "You are in my heart."  I woke up and heard the babbling of the stream and the rustling of the deodars_ at night.





《园丁》 


作者于1915年译自孟加拉语原作。

献给W。B。叶兹。 

序 

译自孟加拉语的大多数关乎爱与生命的歌词都发表在此。此书写在宗教诗集《吉檀嘉利》之前。译文属意译,原文中的内容有些浓缩有些转译。

泰戈尔

The Gardener


Translated by the author from the original Bengali in 1915.

To W. B. Yeats

Preface

Most of the lyrics of love and life, the translations of which from Bengali are published in this book, were written much earlier than the series of religious poems contained in the book named Gitanjali. The translations are not always literal--the originals being sometimes abridged and sometimes paraphrased.
Rabindranath Tagore.

本文所有图片均来自网摘,诚谢作者!音乐为 Giovanni Marradi钢琴曲《假如你离去》,此曲也是音乐剧《巴黎圣母院》中卡西莫多的一个主歌。英汉双语译颂视频中有一两处读错音,因为修改太费时费力,意味着推倒一切从头开始,故只好将错就错,望各位海涵。


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Saturday, December 2, 2017

英汉双语短诗(1-10):夏日誌Bilingual Poem: Summer Suite 1-10 Haiku and Micro Poems



原创英汉双语短诗一组:夏日誌(1-10)


之一,俳句:梅雨天
文/牛娃娃

I,Haiku: Days with Rain of the Plum Season
by ©H.L.Glennie
7/365/2017BLPbyHGVA@ 22/365/2017byHGVA

池间蛙声哗
梅絮手波天天雨
泥腿窜华夏

©H.L.Glennie

Frogs croaking pond
Plum month hands rain-waves daily
Muddy-leg-hype summer

 
©H.L.Glennie 



往日江南的黄梅季节天天下雨,只记得一到那季节马路上泥水四溅,人人觉得萎靡不振没劲道,如今回国也是尽量避开黄梅天,但梅雨对乡村的作物应该是有益的吧?~




之二,川柳:雨咒
文/牛娃娃

II,Senryū: Rain Curse
by ©H.L.Glennie

8/365/2017BLPbyHGVA@ 32/365/2017byHGVA



好几次领教了岭南的“长命雨”,比上海的黄梅天还厉害! 雷暴雨一桶接一桶地浇下来,而且从早到晚下不停,雨势毫无减弱的意思,碰到这时候,如果有事出门,真是交通大瘫痪!但广东人EQ极高,天下它的雨,地上发大水,饮茶不得误!牛吧?! 雨一停就要忙着晒东西,不晒要发霉,烘干机放不下大件物,但一眨眼又下雨了,收进去后,时不时看屏幕,看气象预报师的天气八卦是不是说天要开晴了。


之四,俳句:水火不容
文/牛娃娃

IV,Haiku: Water and Fire Duel
by ©H.L.Glennie

10/365/2017BLPbyHGVA@ 30/365/2017byHGVA


空头风戾蒸
北火南水各不容
水深火热屏

©H.L.Glennie

Wind takes short for steam
North fire 'n south water in the duel
Deep water net fire hot

©H.L.Glennie


大热天有点垂头丧气,打开电脑一看,别处情形也好不到哪去,这叫比上不足比下有余。祈祷天气快点转好。



之五,俳句:绿茶
文/牛娃娃

V,Haiku: Green Tea
by ©H.L.Glennie

11/365/2017BLPbyHGVA@ 35/365/2017byHGVA



一杯好茶醒目清神,大热天该上山养精蓄锐,说走就走。


之六,俳句:避暑
文/牛娃娃

VI,Haiku: Escape Heat
by ©H.L.Glennie

12/365/2017BLPbyHGVA@ 31/365/2017byHGVA


上山来避暑
飒飒隆隆声廊庭
看风云纠缠

©H.L.Glennie

In mount to void heat
Hear rustle 'n rumble down corridor
See wind 'n clouds tangle

©H.L.Glennie



之七,俳句:午休
文/牛娃娃

VII,Afternoon Nap
by ©H.L.Glennie

13/365/2017BLPbyHGVA@ 23/365/2017byHGVA


园中红绿匀
篱外草长蚊蝇嗡
无碍午憩梦

©H.L.Glennie

Red 'n green par in yard
Fence out bugs in high grass
Dream fine in siesta
©H.L.Glennie


之八,川柳:观果胖曲
文/牛娃娃

VIII,Senryū: Look That Fruit Punch
by ©H.L.Glennie

14/365/2017BLPbyHGVA@ 36/365/2017byHGVA


玻璃坛中悠
白梨纤姿漪灵花
红蘋圆肚忌

©H.L.Glennie

Hanging in glass jar
White pear shapes soulful grace
Red apple's round tum bane

©H.L.Glennie



之九,川柳:观修行剧
文/牛娃娃

IX,Senryū: Watch Show Of Virtual Practice
by ©H.L.Glennie

15/365/2017BLPbyHGVA@ 37/365/2017byHGVA

修行人接地
无需催眠也入眠
剧本无新意

©H.L.Glennie
One acts on touch-down,
In sleep with no hypnotics
Scripts nothing new

©H.L.Glennie


之十,汉俳:仲夏夜
文/牛娃娃

X,A Mid-Summer Night
by ©H.L.Glennie

16/365/2017BLPbyHGVA@ 144/365/2017byHGVA


月晕星朦夜
空调窗外声声轰
梦人十日坛

©H.L.Glennie



这首英译版音节太多了,等修改好再补上。
本文所有照片均来自网摘,诚谢作者! 音乐为美国新世纪音乐作曲家大卫希肯的钢琴曲Rusalka。



我的其他原创英汉双语夏季诗:

原创英汉双语组诗《诗季》:春、夏
原创汉英双语诗:荷池
原创配乐中英双语俳句二首《小夜曲》、《绿池》
原创双语摇滚诗四章:池中莲韵




杨万里七绝:晓出净慈寺送林子方、小池 English Translation of Two Ancient Chinese Poems by Yang Wanli: Little Pond, Farewell to Lin Zifang



古诗英译杨万里《七绝
·
晓出净慈寺送林子方》
[南宋]杨万里
汉译英:
牛娃娃©H.L.Glennie
Tune: Qi Jue (Seven-Character Tonal Quatrain)
Farewell to Lin Zifang at Sunrise in Front of the Temple of Pure Mercy
by YANG Wanli (Southern Song Dynasty)
Translated into English from Chinese by
©H.L.Glennie
1/365/2017AC2E-8/365/2017byHGVA

毕竟西湖六月中,
风光不与四时同。
接天莲叶无穷碧,
映日荷花别样红。


 ©H.L.Glennie



古诗英译杨万里《七绝·小池》[南宋]杨万里
汉译英:
牛娃娃
©H.L.Glennie
Tune: Qi Jue (Seven Tonal Quatrain) - Little Pondby YANG Wanli (Southern Song Dynasty)
Translated into English from Chinese by
©H.L.Glennie
2/365/2017AC2E-9/365/2017byHGVA


泉眼无声惜细流,
树阴照水爱晴柔。
小荷才露尖尖角,
早有蜻蜓立上头。



©H.L.Glennie


炎夏避暑之际,看池塘荷莲娉婷,听骄阳下蝉鸣声声,更衬托出夏午之静谧,想起大学的第二个暑假是在杭州度过,也是个象今年这么热的夏天,西湖的荷莲怒放,生机盎然,全然不顾骄阳似火。英译两首杨万里的七绝夏荷诗与大家分享,英译在不损害语意和语境的情况下尽可能依原文韵格。

本文所有图片皆为网摘,诚谢作者!从微博中发现博友留下的某些评论被删除了,特此抱歉!微博上没留迹的评论若被删除,我可能不知道,因为个人页面上有些没通知。在此抱歉,感谢大家留评支持!


枫丹白露君雅评:

两首英译韵都好。第一首都是阴韵角,读起来舒缓,有沉浸景中的情绪,与美景与送别友人的语境都相合,也有一种水墨画的通透感。

喜欢你对“风光不与四时同。”这句的处理,将此时此刻的风与光译出来。。。。 也喜欢第一首最后两句将莲与荷都翻译出来,我印象中很多英译都荷莲不分,虽说两者是一家,但在这里如果连续两句如果都译同样的字就显得拖沓而且也会减低语境的丰富性。

《小池》的韵角更亮爽明快,与欢快的意境相合,诗意的画面充满了动感。

收藏,分享。



我英译的其他唐宋诗词(已发布):


杜牧七绝·汴河阻冻(三版)English Translation of Ancient Chinese Poem by Du Mu: River Bian in Freeze 
英译李商隐《七绝 霜月》
英译李白《七绝·早发白帝城》
英译秦观《满庭芳·红蓼花繁》

古诗英译杨万里《七绝晓出净慈寺送林子方》
古诗英译杨万里《七绝小池》
古诗英译王维《五绝·杂诗》(两译版)



 


我英译的其他唐宋诗词(待发布):
白居易《花非花》
白居易《赋得古原草送别》

禅宗
六祖慧能《菩提偈》
禅师神秀《菩提

崔护《题都城南庄》

杜牧《汴河阻冻》杜牧《七绝·冷斋夜话》
杜牧《清明》
杜牧《山行》

贺知章《咏柳》
蒋捷《一剪梅
·再过吴江》

李白《今人不见古时月》
李白《静夜思》

李商隐《无题之二》
李商隐《夜雨寄北》

陆游《卜算子
·咏梅》
陆游《钗头凤
·红酥手
唐婉《钗头凤·世情薄
柳永《雨霖铃
·寒蝉凄切》柳宗元《五绝 江雪》刘禹锡《竹枝词·杨柳青青江水平》
马祖道一禅诗第九首《为道莫还乡》
孟浩然《春晓》
皮日休《五古 打油谜诗》

苏轼《江城子
·夜记梦》
苏轼《水调歌头
·明月几时有》
苏轼禅诗《一树春风》

王维《山居秋瞑》
王维《五绝 杂诗》
王维《竹里馆》

王之涣《五绝 登
鹳雀楼》晏几道《清平乐·莲开欲遍》
严蕊《如梦令
·道是梨花不是》
张继《枫桥夜泊》